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My watched ticked 6:30 PM as I waited outside the restaurant for my dinner party to arrive. It was a particularly chilly summer evening in Silicon Valley, yet it had a warm feeling to it. The bright lights of the restaurant illuminated the busy streets as the sun set down over the west. It took me a while to notice the telephone booth next to me was ringing for a while now and the temptation to answer it grew with each ring. I couldn't hold it any longer, I had to answer that phone. I snuck in in picked it up, and that's when my night would change forever. "Hello, who is this?" I asked, anxious to find out. Then an odd and annoyingly droll voice answered, "Hello there this is Todd and Barry of Cool 102.7 FM, congratulations sir, you have the chance to win an extravagant mansion and 1,000,000 dollars, courtesy of billionaire Bill Gates, if you win our contest, so what do you say friend would you like to play?" "Yes, yes of course", I answered excitedly. "AL righty then the contest is simple, you will attend a party at said mansion where you will face with three random trivia questions, get them all right and you will win! The directions to the mansion are to your left, you have until 9:00 to complete this challenge, any questions?" I quickly answered, "No, I am ready!" "Ok then, good luck! Go!" Sure enough the directions were posted to my left, including 3 rules: one, I could not enlist any help; two, I could not have any electronic device with me; and three, I had to have fun! I hailed a cab and got to the mansion in just 30 minutes, leaving me with two hours to complete to trivia challenge. I heard loud music on the way in, you could feel the beats from the driveway. The mansion was luxurious, a grand hall with two wings and an iron gate to close it off. The floors were marble, the make of a fine palace and fancier than anything I had ever seen. The crowd was enormous, making it through burned way too much time. At the end of the main hall was a table with three boxes on it and a note card that read: "There are two more rooms ahead of you, make it through each and you will win the contest, Question 1: Who was the first president of the United States?" The three boxes marked with different presidents and the only one I cared about was George Washington's, who was the name on the third box. When I opened the box, a loud ring came from it, which caused the crowd to cheer. Inside was a key to the door behind the table, and I continued on. The time was now 8:00, and the second room was an even grander hall. The table this time had no card, but still had three boxes, all marked with different years. The question was plastered on the table itself: "What year did professional basketball player Tim Duncan win his first championship?" The clues were put all around the walls, mostly just stats and numbers. My eyes finally came across a picture of Duncan himself holding a trophy that read, "1999 NBA FINALS MVP" A dead giveaway. I proceeded to open the 1999 box, which held another key and a note that read: "Congrats! But those were just the easy ones, the final question is through the door ahead, remember, if you get this next one right, not only will this become your house, but you will also win more cash!" I burst open the door and to my surprise it was the guys themselves. Todd and Barry relayed the question, but I'd rather not say what it was. Instead I will tell you it was a very personal question that created one of the happiest days of my life. "I'm very happy you came to see Mr. Gates, this mansion is one of the loveliest I've ever seen!" "Well I am honored to have such a distinguished young man win my contest, soon this will all be over with" The visit was a surprise, but Bill just wanted to get to know who won the contest. It was only a couple months after the meeting that I would finally realize what he meant...
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Dream Vs Reality
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Dream Vs Reality

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              My watched ticked 6: 30 PM as I waited outside the restaurant for my dinner party to arrive. It was a particularly chilly summer evening in Silicon Valley, yet it had a warm feeling to it. The bright lights of the restaurant illuminated the busy streets as the sun set down over the west. It took me a while to notice the telephone booth next to me was ringing for a while now and the temptation to answer it grew with each ring. I couldn't hold it any longer, I had to answer that phone. I snuck in in picked it up, and that's when my night would change forever.
             
              "Hello, who is this? " I asked, anxious to find out. Then an odd and annoyingly droll voice answered,
             
              "Hello there this is Todd and Barry of Cool 102. 7 FM, congratulations sir, you have the chance to win an extravagant mansion and 1,000,000 dollars, courtesy of billionaire Bill Gates, if you win our contest, so what do you say friend would you like to play? "
             
              "Yes, yes of course", I answered excitedly.
             
              "AL righty then the contest is simple, you will attend a party at said mansion where you will face with three random trivia questions, get them all right and you will win! The directions to the mansion are to your left, you have until 9: 00 to complete this challenge, any questions? "
             
              I quickly answered, "No, I am ready! "
             
              "Ok then, good luck! Go! "
             
              Sure enough the directions were posted to my left, including 3 rules: one, I could not enlist any help; two, I could not have any electronic device with me; and three, I had to have fun! I hailed a cab and got to the mansion in just 30 minutes, leaving me with two hours to complete to trivia challenge. I heard loud music on the way in, you could feel the beats from the driveway. The mansion was luxurious, a grand hall with two wings and an iron gate to close it off. The floors were marble, the make of a fine palace and fancier than anything I had ever seen. The crowd was enormous, making it through burned way too much time. At the end of the main hall was a table with three boxes on it and a note card that read:
             
              "There are two more rooms ahead of you, make it through each and you will win the contest,
             
              Question 1: Who was the first president of the United States? "
             
              The three boxes marked with different presidents and the only one I cared about was George Washington's, who was the name on the third box.
             
              When I opened the box, a loud ring came from it, which caused the crowd to cheer. Inside was a key to the door behind the table, and I continued on. The time was now 8: 00, and the second room was an even grander hall. The table this time had no card, but still had three boxes, all marked with different years. The question was plastered on the table itself: "What year did professional basketball player Tim Duncan win his first championship? " The clues were put all around the walls, mostly just stats and numbers. My eyes finally came across a picture of Duncan himself holding a trophy that read,
             
              "1999 NBA FINALS MVP" A dead giveaway. I proceeded to open the 1999 box, which held another key and a note that read: "Congrats! But those were just the easy ones, the final question is through the door ahead, remember, if you get this next one right, not only will this become your house, but you will also win more cash! " I burst open the door and to my surprise it was the guys themselves.
             
              Todd and Barry relayed the question, but I'd rather not say what it was. Instead I will tell you it was a very personal question that created one of the happiest days of my life.
             
              "I'm very happy you came to see Mr. Gates, this mansion is one of the loveliest I've ever seen! "
             
              "Well I am honored to have such a distinguished young man win my contest, soon this will all be over with"
             
              The visit was a surprise, but Bill just wanted to get to know who won the contest. It was only a couple months after the meeting that I would finally realize what he meant. . .
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